Thank you for submitting your application to Melodies of Life! However, before we can reach a decision, we would like to see the following revisions:
The personality section needs to be rewritten. As it stands, it is little more than a synopsis of canon events (with several non-canon incidents included) and reads more like the history section. While we allow some degree of headcanon in the case of minor characters, there shouldn't be any included for a character as prominent as Keith. Many of his key personality traits were missing, and there was a very heavy emphasis on his relationship with Shiro that had a tendency to overshadow everything else. We would also like a revision of the Mognet sample, as the one provided does not give us a clear picture of the character in question.
You have 72 hours to submit your revision. If you feel this is not enough time or if you need clarifications regarding the revision request, then please feel free to contact one of the moderators, we will get back to you as soon as possible.
REVISIONS REQUEST
The personality section needs to be rewritten. As it stands, it is little more than a synopsis of canon events (with several non-canon incidents included) and reads more like the history section. While we allow some degree of headcanon in the case of minor characters, there shouldn't be any included for a character as prominent as Keith. Many of his key personality traits were missing, and there was a very heavy emphasis on his relationship with Shiro that had a tendency to overshadow everything else. We would also like a revision of the Mognet sample, as the one provided does not give us a clear picture of the character in question.
You have 72 hours to submit your revision. If you feel this is not enough time or if you need clarifications regarding the revision request, then please feel free to contact one of the moderators, we will get back to you as soon as possible.